Actually, to be honest I did not realize the two
different stories, but when I did notice them I thought that
they did not conflict in the least and were fine as they
were. Even someone like me can make a mistake, it just so
happens that THIS one didn't really screw up the story. I am
at least happy that you noticed something that nobody else
did, it shows you are thinking about the story. As for the
difference in this latest chapter, I am doing this on
purpose. It is written completely different than the
previous stories, since it is written in PRESENT form
NARRATIVE. This episode of the story is meant to convey the
underpinnings that everyone seems to have missed, without
giving away the rest. It is meant to be dreamlike and sort
of surreal. The struggle involved in this particular chapter
will be of a slightly different sort than the ones focused
on in the previous chapters. I know exactly where I am going
with the story, and I've known from the beginning what
chapters I would write (Overall). So don't think that this
chapter is any less quality than the previous chapters,
since I am working very very delicately to get THIS one
correct, just as I did the last several chapters. I am an
artist, a bard, a storyteller... so just hang in there and
be patient, and you will realize why I am writing the way I
am now. By the by, if you want to review something, e-mail
me first and review either the recent section of 3:1, or Dea
Ex Machina, so that I know your quality of review. --Kaoru
Shimitsu--
That was low.. Anyway I thought abouyt taht but didn't
mention it because Daisuke if I remember correctly said that
Hiroshi was the one that had broken up with her.. at the
party.. Maybe Hiroshi haed felt it to painfull to say that
he had gotten dumpeed and had lied? doesn't seem much like
the Hiroshi you have made us all love though.. Admitt it..
You screwed up.. and now you are pretending that you had
planned it all along ^^ .. sorry.. well anyway I think yu
shouldn't rush so much. This latest chaper doesn't feel as
loved as the rest you have written. It is like you have felt
the great burden of having to match your previous great
chapters, and you have choked under the expectations.. Don't
cry though.. We all have that problem.. me myself never have
published any of my works seeing as I am never happy with
them.. But the language in the latest chapter isn't the same
you that yu used in the others.. and this takes much of the
magic from your story.. It is as if you have read other
stories and goten influenced by them forgetting your own
work.. What other stories am I talking about? well, Thy
Outward part, who you yourself had inspired you to write
this.. and the Nullifier.. and Iris.. .. But you are still
great!.. It just feels as if you have burnt yourself out
trying to please everybody. Take your time.. Your true fans
liek me, can wait forever! My thoughts on the marriage well
I would say it here.. But seeing as it is so damn obvious
what will happen I won't say it. 1 because I woudl spoil it
for those who hasn't figured it out 2 beacuse if it isnb't
what is going to happen I don't want to make the author
change her/his mind. 3 If I am right the author might be sad
taht soemoen has figured it out, and will change it just so
that people won't have figured it out.. ---umm yes... and
now for my ussual ranting.. -- Don't you just hate Jack
Stails fanfics? I mean.. first of they aren't believeable..
secondly he makes Akane into some supercharged power martial
artist.. amkes Shampoo marry Ryouga! -_-;; That is almsot as
bad as Her marrying Mousee.. (No offence Kauro I like teh
way your Shampoo chooses mousse) And then he makes Ranko as
he originally calls Ranma's female side.. get togehter with
that Tofu! I mean Yuk! Yuk! ThATS SICK! The guy is what
twice her age? and he is so booring! Even taht Idiot Ryouga
would have been a better choice, but not by much.. He shoudl
have given her to tatewaki or something.. At least then she
would have been with someone that really loves her. which
reminds me.. If you want any help with geting that nice
feeling back to your fanfic.. I can pre-read it for you. If
so.. tell me so and send it to Fanfic2000@hotmail.com
You are assuming that whatever marriage happens will be
the end... -Kaoru Shimitsu
-> forgot my name: Meradon for any comments to my
comment ;-)
20.06.2001 I guess in my opinion there should never be a
mariage, 'cause that would mean that the end of the Fanfic
would come nearer :-((( ;-) But as I can't stop it, I'd
prefer my second favorite Character in this Fic, Hiroshi
:-))) He's just a great guy, and I really wonder what he's
doing the time Ranma's alone, and what happens with his
fellow, Kuno. Future'll tell...
pollGEAR 
